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Le Bateau du papier by Fareons Le Bateau du papier by Fareons
This was originally made for a contest that's held every year at my school, wich gives away 75€ as a prize, so... I just couldn't afford not to give it a try. The contest is called "The paper ship" if somebody was wondering about it -wich is what the letters say, but written in catalan-.

I'm pretty happy about how this came out, but when printed the green colors -dunno why- get more mixed than what I'd like. Surprisingly, this did take some time, but less than waht I would expect. I guess I'm improving at that, heh. And at the skin. I mean, look. When I finished, I just couldn't feel more proud of myself.

Oh, and just don't pay attention to the non artistic letters at all at the bottom. Legal bases of the contest, you see.

Hope every one digs it, cause I do!
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hEyJude4 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009  Student General Artist
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I like how you faded from Pink to Green, but I feel that you might want to repeat the pink somewhere near the bottom. Maybe a pink splat on the arm on the left.

It is a very beautiful piece :D
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Felicity-MadHatter Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hello from feedback club!

I like the colour cheme, one of my favorites)
Now, about what bothers me with that picture.
I think there's a problem with an empty spot behind her back. I would draw her legs too, to fit her in the picture or change the pose, so the legs won't be seen at all. Also I think you used too much techniques, that paper-hair style doesn't work with highly digital drawing, they are from different stories for me. I'd make it in more traditional way.
And, by the way, I really like the typeface and the way it's composed, envy you here))
Hope that helpes!
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
To be honest, about the legs thing, it was mostly a problem of lazyness... T.T

I'd love to paint the traditinal way, but, you see... I just don't have any tools for it :(

And I do like the paper+digital painting. Meh, now you made me cry.

Thank you for all!
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Felicity-MadHatter Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lazyness rules))
Well, if so, it's a problem, than(
Oh no, I made you cry! So sorry( I think you might try different way of combining those? There must be some way))
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
Digital painting and traditional looking resorces? As far as I know, It's been already done many times, and I don't think it looks bad...
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Felicity-MadHatter Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I mean, you can use some different traditional part. Not aquarel and newspaper. Or maybe differenet proportions of digital and traditional.
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
Mn... true, I should try to balace it.
Thanks for the advice!
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natthyluv Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
wow that's gorgeous!
it's been sitting in my inbox for days and I've been meaning to comment on it
sooo good :)
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
Thank you soooo much!
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natthyluv Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
my pleasure :)
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Raishuu Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
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Well I really like this, the colours are gorgeous and fit together and the composition seems good to me, too (don't know anything about that, so...) BUT (there's always a but :D ) I don't like what you did to her hair. I know it's probably part of the concept but it just doesn't fit to the rest of the drawing and it makes the hair look flat. Worst part is I don't know what you could do about so that's probably not helping at all.
So let's move on to the eye. Is it closed or open? Is that makeup or her natural (very weird) eyecolour? I can't really make it out so maybe you want to clarifiy it - if the eye is closed, get rid of the lines on the eyelid, if it's open, enhance them.
Another thing I noticed is the left hand. While I really like the way you shaded the skin, I think you made a mistake here. In my opinion the palm should be shaded, too, since the light seems to come from above. Right now it looks like the back of a foot with the tendon in the middle standing out, you know what I mean?
I'd also clean up some skin colour that went outside the line at her leg (where's her second one btw?).
Hm. I think I'm done :D There are some issues with the lineart, let me know if you wanna hear them. I wanted to keep my critique to the things that can easily be changed :aww:

Anyways good luck with that contest!! :dance:
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
Tell me about the lineart too, why not, I guess I already know the mistakes since I did this half a year ago and when I painted it a week ago I was thinkig all the time things such as "Why did I make such stupid folds in the clothes?" or "Why did I make -insert here the word that means "those bones that are in the superior part of the hand where teh fingers get attached to the hand itself"- so big?

Oh, and about the hair, I do really like it, I always wanted to make a flate looking hair with some text in it.
The leg being badly painted, with the color coming outside of it, was intentional. If you look at it, all the color itself drops at the end of the leg. Oh, and... I was too lazy to mke the other leg >.<

In fact, the palm of the hand was intended to be shaded too, but I'm afraid, now taht I look at the whole picture that the contrast darkness-light it's too low to tell where the light and the darkness are exactly...

Eyes were intended to be open, and to be filled with paint. I thought it was sucha neat concept since the contest its for making the *first page of a magazine* of a magazine wich happens to be kind of artistic, so I thought; text in the hair to represent literature and paint in the eye to represent art. But all my friends told me that it lookedlike such a painful eye disease, so I think it was a total fail :sad:
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Raishuu Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
Yeah I noticed the knuckles thing... I tried to bend my hand in that position. It didn't work and it hurt. I'm not sure about the face, the right cheekbone seems to stick out very much :confused: Her neck is very thick. Like... very. And I'd give the pearls around her hand something to stick to, like a string or something, they are pretty much floating right now.

I noticed that the colour drops at the end and that part does look intentional, but the badly painted leg doesn't look intentional to me, just ... badly painted. Above that violet paint for eample. You know, it's enough to be noticed, but not enough that it's obviously meant that way ;) So I'd probably make it a bit stronger, maybe with the paint dripping down from her leg or something.

Well it's the thought that counts ^^; I wouldn't have filled the white part of the eyes with paint or maybe have it dripping down her forehead into her eye or something... And I just noticed the other eye should be visible, too... I think :P
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
God, there's nothing that escapes you. Okay, I'll tell the truth: I was to lazy to paint the eyes.

And YES, the neck is way to thick. I just dont'k know how I hadn't see that before. I mean... wow.

And the right checkbone is misplaced too, right. I didn't see that one coming, altough that now that you mention it I remember hating that while painting.

Anyways, It's like I'm gonna change anything; I already delivered it to the contest jury. So it's no longer in my hand :(
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Raishuu Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
eagle eeeeeyessss...
That's why I hesitated to point these out since I guessed you couldn't change it anymore - and because even if you could change it, lineart mistakes are so much harder to change than colouring ones.
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
YES they are. By the way you talk of it, I guess you have already suffered that.
Oh, now that I think of it, there aren't no many active gimmefeedbak members lately, are there?
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Raishuu Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
fairy lights. bent ankle. no repair.
I dunno, I don't really keep an eye on it. I did receive a few GF comments on my latest submission but it took some time. I just submitted yours this morning, so be patient :aww:
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
It's not that I'm umpatient, it's just that when I joined first I remember having like loads of messages, and It simply surprised me how much it changed in this little time.
Oh, and yes, I remember that ankle.
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gracie-magnificent Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
wah! i missed you! it looks great tell me how the contest turns out
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
Missed you too! I'll definetely will inform you! I'll get to know it te 23 of april... hope I win!
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gracie-magnificent Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
speaking of contests i entered a writing contest not too long ago and ended up getting a top prize. i think my piece gets published, 1 of the 3 that does. tomorrow i have to go to mansfield university to redeem my prize and all that. im pretty siked.
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
Is it in dA so I can read it?
I hope it's nota very difficult english, or I wont be able to >.<

What's the prize? :p
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gracie-magnificent Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
no it was a school project ): i don't have it
but i dont know what the prize is.. i think its being in the book but im not sure.. hm.
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2009
You should check, maybeh theres money :p
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gracie-magnificent Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
nope it was published was the big prize (:
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
Stills good :)
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AnnaGrishnackh Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
Wow, impressionant. M'agrada molt. :)
Ja es trobaven a faltar els teus dibuixos per aquí!
Realment t'ha quedat molt bé. I de l'única cosa que m'anava a queixar (les lletres de sota), resulta que no puc perque són obligades..xD
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
Haha! Si es que soc intocable, no em pots treure fallos..!
La veritat es que portava com bastant de temps sense passarme per aqui... no sé, simplement he perdut una mica l'interes. Es una cosa que sembla anar a fases.

Ey, m'encanta que t'agradi, aquests comentaris sicers sempre son lo millor ^^
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AnnaGrishnackh Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
De res home.
Te'ls mereixes, els comentaris!
jajaja
salut! :)
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moon-and-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
Very nice! I do love the colors used to emphasize the vibrance. <3 It's been so long!
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
Yes it's been! <3
... my english is not very good, so may I ask... what do you mean with "emphasize the vibrance"?
Nice to hear of you again!
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moon-and-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
Emphasize is sort of like giving more weight to.

Vibrance is bright and colorful

So essentially I was saying that your colors go really well together, the darks ones help bring out the brghtness in the lighter ones.

Does my silly english make sense now?
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Fareons Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
Yessir!

Mn.. I should have done that, honestly.
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